Minggu, 08 Januari 2017

A Brief Story

A Brief Story

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The Gambler
It's the similar each Friday evening. The nice and cozy shower beats in opposition to aching muscular tissues-shoulders, neck and arms; peels of wetness streaming down again, buttocks and legs...furry, muscular legs.
He gets out of the tub, careful to step onto the blue and yellow striped mat, lest he go away a trail of moist footprints alongside the bathroom ground. Gazing right into a mirror clouded with steam, he balls up one fist and wipes the glass clear with the fleshy part of his hand.
Staring at the green eyed reflection, he turns his head back and forth and scratches his jaw as if pondering whether to shave or not. However, the decision has already been made. To not shave would be a decisive second to alter a routine established years ago.
He's aloof to the truth that it makes him look ragged. Not rugged , as a youthful man with much less grey would present, but scruffy and unkempt. He definitely doesn't agonize about the potential razor burn that occurs nuzzling as much as somebody, (anybody), with softer pores and skin. It'd been far too long for any consideration of that. No, he would not consider pleasing anyone but himself. It's the prickly sensation that the stubs on his jowl create that's bothersome to him.
So, his shaving ritual begins. When he's finished he inspects the results with a keen eye, adds a stinging splash of aftershave, and goes concerning the business of gathering up his garments.
It's Friday night and as he zips up the fly of his too tight denims, rigorously tucking in the soft, black tail of his shirt, he appears to be like around for his boots. Ostrich. Heels three inches or so. Previous, but his meticulous care has maintained them in good situation. He pockets his wallet and his gaze follows the road of the only bureau selecting the ancient, silver dollar quietly ready for him. His marker. His amulet.
Time to go.
He drives a hundred miles to fulfill the boys at the club for the weekly poker recreation. He goes to win. By no means thoughts that he is lost paychecks and more in the midst of the evening. He's a winner. He is a gambler
Notes on the quick story: The Gambler
In December 2007, my sister, who is a freelance author, sent me two books in assist of writing fiction: The Pocket Muse by Monica Wooden. A splendidly compact set of books full of writing prompts of every type. I've: Endless Inspiration and Concepts & Inspirations for writing. She provides images and suggestions for fulfillment all through the pages. The Gambler was my first story written January 1, 2008. It is a flash fiction. Flash fiction is a sort of writing that's derived from a immediate. The writer is expected to complete the story in a designated, however restricted, time period. It's thought-about a great tool to assist writers overcome thought blocks and to spur on the inventive muse.
In the immediate for this story, the instructions had been to "write about someone who thinks he is something he actually shouldn't be". The perilous lifetime of the gambler is that form of particular person.
Kenny Rogers singing The Gambler
Take a look at this ballot
Have you learnt anyone who has lost great amounts of cash; or might be hooked on gambling?
Yes
No
What's Gambler's Anonymous?
Gambler's Anonymous, or GA, is a 12 step program that gives nonjudgmental help for people who find themselves compulsive gamblers. Primarily based on the Alcoholic Anonymous 12 step program, individuals collect to share tales of their gambling dependancy and the consequences it has on their lives, as well as the lives of those closest to them.
Should you suppose you may have a gambling habit you possibly can follow the link here to take a 20 query quiz. -questions
If you want extra details about Gambler's Nameless or the place to discover a assembly observe the link right here: -us
Keep in mind: there is no such thing as a shame in reaching out for help.
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Comments forty seven comments
LindaJM 6 years ago from Submit Falls, Idaho, USA
Flash fiction! I REALLY LIKE flash fiction and have written some myself. You give a wonderful description of your gambler... I can see him via studying about his habits.
ankigarg87 6 years ago
Krissy Parker 6 years in the past
I favored it! Now you have me desirous to read more - hope he wins!
travel_man1971 6 years ago from Bicol, Philippines
Extra stories, please!!! After I noticed the HP alert on my e-mail concerning your hub, I immediately imagined that you're going to embrace the video of Kenny Roger's the gambler. My guess is true^-^. Beloved the tune!
Denise Handlon 6 years ago from North Carolina
Creator
Thanks for reading the piece, everybody. The hubpages audience was the primary publicity of this story. I admire all the feedback.
@Linda-Oh, is that what that quick piece is named? LOL 'Flash' Fiction...or is it named that b/c it is done 'on the spot'? I am so new to this I'm wide open to learning extra concerning the craft.
@ankigarg-hiya, nice to fulfill you. Thanks :)
@Krissy-Wow, thanks for commenting. Hugs to you.
@Journey-you have been probably two steps forward of me when I completed it in the early morning. I nearly forgot about that track (though I really like K.R and truly have a story of assembly him when I used to be 14 and getting his autograph on my arm!) I used to be making an attempt to squeeze the phrase depend out and make the hub a bit of extra interesting apart from leaving just the brief story. Thanks in your encouragement.
Pamela99 6 years ago from United States
Nice description of the gambler and his motion. You undoubtedly need to proceed writing.
Denise Handlon 6 years in the past from North Carolina
Writer
Thanks Pam. :) How are you? Still busy pumping out hubs I see. I am getting moved to day shift in about 2 wks. I'm wanting forward to that.
travelespresso 6 years in the past from Somewhere in this exciting world.
You have "advised" this story with such finesse and fervour. I adore it.
De Greek 6 years in the past from UK
Very good story :-)
Author
Hello Journey and De Greek-Glad you had the prospect to stop by. Thanks for the feedback. It was an attention-grabbing writing train to say the least. :) At all times a story behind the story, eh?
kaltopsyd 6 years ago from Trinidad initially, however now within the USA
Oooh! I want I had the power to write down like this. All my "quick stories" end up as mini novels. I'm trying to manage myself. :D haha. I love this flash fiction story. It was quite impressive to me truly.
I wish I had more time to learn the Hubs of great writers equivalent to yourself. But now I have classes once more. :( I am unable to await the summer season to compensate for your writings! :) Great job! Rated up and superior!
Denise Handlon 6 years in the past from North Carolina
Creator
Hello Kim, good to see you here. :) I perceive your busy schedule. I really feel the same means. Thanks so much for the compliment. I respect it. I'll be ready to your subsequent chapter. Sustain the good work.
TravelinAsia 6 years in the past from Thailand/Southeast Asia
Nice writing. very poetic! I am simply wondering in the event you wrote the story about me?
Denise Handlon 6 years ago from North Carolina
Author
Hahahahaha That is fantastic Journey! You made my day.
Glad you loved it. Thanks to your feedback. :) Hope you learn more of my work. I will do the identical for yours.
Jed Fisher 6 years in the past from Oklahoma
Total an ideal story and I enjoyed studying it, thank you. I do really feel the need to assist with some constructive critisim, nonetheless. The primary sentence limits the story too quickly and might be more practical if it had been moved to be the last sentence of the story as an alternative. Again, thanks for a terrific story.
risatungol 6 years in the past from Philippines
Very good brief story! impeccable use of words... I hope i can write like that :) love it!
Denise Handlon 6 years in the past from North Carolina
Creator
Hi Jed-thanks for the feedback. I am not sure the way it limits the story??? explain please. Aside from the title being a useless give away, I preferred the ending paragraph b/c of the message in between the lines...? If that makes any sense. Anyhow, thanks for taking the time to read it with the eye of the critic. I recognize that. It is what helps the improvement of a author, isn't it. :)
Hi Risa- good to have you ever cease by and skim the story. Thanks for your remark. Play with the words and sentences. Get a visual and then write what comes up in the description of the visual. My practice did not come over night time. (see Mr. Jed Fisher's comment above yours). It's a craft that wants time, attention and honing. Preserve working on it and what you're doing is creating your talent. :)
mache de la torre 6 years in the past
Hahaha, I ought to know, Denise, since I now work in a on line casino. I imagined the gambler as you described his face...its very lucid, very detailed...great writing.
Denise Handlon 6 years in the past from North Carolina
Author
Oh mache-that is so humorous! Thanks for the comment. I suppose you must say you'd know, LOL
mache de la torre 6 years in the past
Stands corrected...I might know! LOL!
Denise Handlon 6 years in the past from North Carolina
Author
Dear Mache- I am chuckling proper now. After I wrote my comment back to you, I didn't make a comment to 'appropriate' you. Your statement was positive and did not need correcting. My remark was a method of affirming what you already mentioned-an agreement to your assertion. Preserve writing, it's an excessive amount of enjoyable to stop! :)
WillStarr 5 years in the past from Phoenix, Arizona
Nice stuff!
Author
LOL Thanks, Will, glad you loved. I will learn yours as nicely.
attemptedhumour 5 years ago from Australia
He's the epitome of virtually each gambler. Full of swagger, but mild on property. A clever tale of caution.
Denise Handlon 5 years ago from North Carolina
Author
LOL Thanks for your feedback AH. I loved writing this piece-know a few folks like him. :)
shamani67 5 years ago
Great story, liked it and was so well written. An important pleasure to learn.
Denise Handlon 5 years ago from North Carolina
Writer
Thanks Shamani-I respect your suggestions. Glad you enjoyed the story.
Happyboomernurse 5 years ago from South Carolina
Very vivid, detailed and correct description of a gambler who's utterly out of touch with how others understand him. Voted up and interesting.
Denise Handlon 5 years in the past from North Carolina
Creator
Hello Gail-it was a fun 'prompt' to write. I like doing those once in awhile to test my fiction writing abilities. I do far better with memoir! LOL
Happyboomernurse 5 years in the past from South Carolina
I think you have got a aptitude for both! Would like to see you create some fiction for the upcoming contest.
Denise Handlon 5 years in the past from North Carolina
Creator
LOL I do not suppose I'll have time, Gail, but thanks for the encouragement.
injurycase 5 years ago from North Pearl Street, Albany, New York
similar right here. I do not even have the time to take action.. LOL! anyway, thanks and carry on posting!
RealHousewife 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO
This is nice! I think you probably did a fabulous job with the small print. The scene played out simply as it will be in actual life.
I have a nice Ostrich purse that might go great with his boots and fleshy hands! Up and everything!
Denise Handlon 4 years in the past from North Carolina
Writer
Hahaha that's funny, RHW. A nice touch, I need to say. :)
Thanks for stopping by and reading/commenting. Yep, they go down H A R D and a few by no means stand up again!
Simply Ask Susan four years in the past from Ontario, Canada
Denise, This can be a great story. As I used to be reading this I may see my uncle.
Denise Handlon 4 years in the past from North Carolina
Creator
dahoglund four years ago from Wisconsin Rapids
Good story. I've not really pared down much to the purpose of flash fiction. I do preserve them fairly quick though.
Denise Handlon 4 years in the past from North Carolina
Author
Thanks for stopping by to learn this one dahoglund. It was a true writing challenge for me, however I think about it will be much more difficult if I had a timer going and wanted to finish it in beneath 50 minutes, haha.
rcrumple four years in the past from Kentucky
I've identified a few of us whose lives have been ruined by playing. There's another headed that means. The most I ever did was play the slots. Usually fairly cheap and time consuming. Your story describes all three very nicely in their preparation before heading to the on line casino right here. They've spent their lives changing into profitable, not they're ruining it. But, in their minds, they're only shedding what they will afford to. Too unhealthy their wives didn't see it that method. Nice Hub!
Denise Handlon four years in the past from North Carolina
Creator
Thanks Richard. With any dependancy, the consequences are distaserous and sad. I've recognized people who find themselves hooked on playing, too. Nice materials for the story! Fascinating, the writing prompt was not about 'gambling'. The prompt was really: "Write about somebody who thinks he's one thing other than what he is." The first thing that popped into my mind was my buddy and his ideas about his poker talent. I've watched him actually lose paychecks, and he refused to hand it over to me. Of course, I just step aside then. I've prompt 12 step and it's 'No Means' that's not for me... Thanks for reading this and commenting.
unknown spy four years in the past from Neverland - where kids by no means develop up.
Very good! The title reminds me of the film "21".
Denise Handlon four years ago from North Carolina
Creator
Oh, sure...I saw the trailers for that, and part of the movie, however not the entire thing. Thanks! I used to be looking for one thing to watch this w/e. Thanks for stopping by. :)
unknown spy four years ago from Neverland - where youngsters never grow up.
You must watch the movie.. Very nice one and worth recommending!
isenhower33 4 years ago from Crothersville, IN
Hey now if we're recommending motion pictures i ought to be here for this :) ltms
Denise Handlon 4 years in the past from North Carolina
Writer
Thanks, unknown spy-I will do this. I really was fascinated by this film again in the present day. :)
Hi isenhower33-okay...what's YOUR suggestion? :) We're all ears.
khmazz three years in the past from South Florida
Superior, properly written, a incredible learn! Voted Up!
Denise Handlon 3 years ago from North Carolina
Creator
Hello khmazz-it all the time tickles me when I learn a comment like yours-thanks. When you enjoyed that one, you might also wish to learn my other short fiction: Attending to know you.
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